Hannarr's life

I started writing a story bout 2 weeks ago. This is just an extract from it. Thought would blog it to see response. So yeah. Be kind.

“I ran up the stairs as fast as I could, the blood pounding in my ears. He started to follow me, his fists clenched, his face irate and infuriated. His legs were twice the size of mine. He could climb three steps at a time compared to my measly two. I reached my door and tried to grab hold of the door handle. I slammed it shut. It wouldn’t close. I tried again, my hands shaking, my breath jagged. I glanced down and gasped with terror. His foot was wedged in my door. I noticed that look in his eyes, as mine met his and knew exactly what was coming. What I feared.

He shoved me with his huge hands and pushed me out the way. The door slammed shut. Panic flooded over me. He smirked as he realised my vulnerability. He shoved me again. This time his hand did not leave my bruised shoulder blade. My face pressed against my cold wall. I could feel his hot breath down my neck, his sick laughter inside. I shut my eyes tight and waited, hoping for it to soon be over. Then I felt it. I doubled over in pain as his boney knee shoved fast and hard into my stomach. I screamed and clutched at my stomach. He pulled at my arms, leaving my stomach un-nursed and sore. Then it came again. I heard a loud crack at he started on my face. The pain was excruciating. Sudden pain went to my head. My mind felt black, empty, heavy. My eyes misted over. I tried to open them, but my eyes just stung. Not tears of sadness, or pain. These were new, uncontrollable. Water was just coming out. Unexplainable. Just watering. I wiped them dry, but my eyes were still cloudy. My mind still dark and concealed. It was getting heavier and heavier, the pain getting worse and the feeling of my brain swelling. I let out a shriek. What had he done to me? I couldn’t stand, couldn’t think. My entire body went numb and I collapsed. I looked towards the door as a final search for help. I saw him abandon me and close the door behind him. Was I going to die? My minded started to cloud over then, I just lay there, watching him go. Watching my father walk away.”

Cheers people x